Young Writers Society

Thanks for reading this.There is indeed! Care to take a guess? (I'll only tell if you guess correctly!)Heehee.

Jasmine Hart wrote:It's funny how my words
All become so skewed
When they earn refuge
In your lost treasure casket
At last.

huh? what happened? is it over?

I liek this. At first I thought it was haiku then after some headbanging I remembered Haiku has less lines (I think). Its a bit too short to crittique really but I think that if you gave it a good title, it should complete it perfectly.

It was very short but I think that was what made it so good.
I think I got the hidden message but i'm not so sure. I don't think you should tell people what it means because is more mysterious and flexible if people make their own minds up.
I agree Save- Ferris the use of the words skewed and refuge made it unique.
I have to say, i love it jasmine.
My suggestion for the title is,
Refuge but i havn't really thought too hard.
Charlotte

I liked the shortness of this poem. There was definetly a hidden message in here somewhere that will take a while to crack.
I think you made great word choices with the "skewed" and "refuge."

I think it was brillaitn x]

~ferris AKA Tara~

Okay, this is going to sound enormously stupid, but... I'm not sure if I get it. Again, stupid. HEY I'M JUST A FRICKIN KID! GIMME A BREAK!! oh, sorry, the voices were yell- nevermind.
There's nothing to criticize you on because it was so short. Maybe make it longer? Either way, it had a nice flow.

Hi Jasmine!

Let me see... Well I have to admit that it's a little short but it has a nice beat to it and the words flow together well. Simple and meaningful. Very good =)

Simple yet with a hidden meaning. I can't really comment or make any criticisms it's too short to do that. All I can say is that it's very similar to prose. You could pretty much read the lines as a single paragraph and it would make sense.

I like your use of refuge, I don't really know why - it sort of suits the poem.